It tells a story happened in her childhood. Boys invited her to join their sports. They took a snowball fight together. A snowball hit a driver's head and he started to chase them.
What author learn about this experience is what ever they did in the childhood, they were always happy. They were happy to be exhausted and terrified.
"If in that snow backyard the driver of the black Buick had cut our heads off, micky's and mine, I would have died happily, for nothing has required so much of me since as being chased all over Pittsburgh in the middle of winter running terrified, exhausted by this sainted, skinny, furious red headed man who wished to have a word with us. "
When I was reading this part, I felt I lost something. I lost my precious mind in these years. What always stayed in my mind before had gone. What made I lost those memory? Is it called a kind of growth? When I think about these things, the only thing comes up is regret. That can not be found back by acting like a child. We lost our childhoods from our mind.
Tuesday, October 7, 2014
Monday, October 6, 2014
Grammar Mistake
Article mistake
”I pointed way for him when he was in low ebb.” In this sentence I missed an article before way. Many writers usually have this problem. A and an have the same meaning with one. A is used before consonant and an is used before vowel. They used to describe one kind of noun. In this sentence, I missed an indefinite article before way. What I want to present is “I” want to show a path for “him” to get out of the low ebb. In this sentence, “way” is a kind of thing that have different types. There are lots of way but not limit on one way, so we use a but not the. If a noun doesn’t have any article, it usually is wrong.
”I pointed way for him when he was in low ebb.” In this sentence I missed an article before way. Many writers usually have this problem. A and an have the same meaning with one. A is used before consonant and an is used before vowel. They used to describe one kind of noun. In this sentence, I missed an indefinite article before way. What I want to present is “I” want to show a path for “him” to get out of the low ebb. In this sentence, “way” is a kind of thing that have different types. There are lots of way but not limit on one way, so we use a but not the. If a noun doesn’t have any article, it usually is wrong.
“Generally creative writing is the piece of writing that written follow people’s heart.” In this sentence I missed an a between is and piece. It said creative writing is a kind of writing. We should add an a before piece of writing. A piece of writing follow people’s heart is not specific so we use a but not the.
“For example, if I say, "Let's read the book," I mean a specific book. If I say, "Let's read a book," I mean any book rather than a specific book.
Here's another way to explain it: The is used to refer to a specific or particular member of a group. For example, "I just saw the most popular movie of the year." There are many movies, but only one particular movie is the most popular. Therefore, we use the "A/an" is used to refer to a non-specific or non-particular member of the group. For example, "I would like to go see a movie." Here, we're not talking about a specific movie. We're talking about any movie. There are many movies, and I want to see any movie. I don't have a specific one in mind.”
(https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/540/01/)
How to avoid this problem in the future? I think when first we should read our essay after we write it. When we are reading we should focus on all the nouns we wrote. Articles are all related to nouns, so when we check every noun in the article, we can find out those wrong places easily. Using of indefinite article and definite article is harder. We need specify the noun is definite of not. For example a name usually is definite, but we don’t need to add “the” before it. An apple is not definite and start with vowel, so we use an before apple. After we know that articles are, we can avoid this mistake in our writing.
Tuesday, September 30, 2014
letter final draft
Dear Annie
Hi, Annie. My name is Winda. Now I work in a small company in New York Cit. I am now working with my partner, a business man called Ray. We are doing the Medical Devices business. We are now on a hard way of making our business range wider.
I heard about your story with Jim; our pasts are quite similar. Ray was quite arrogant before. He insisted his own idea for ever although it disturbed a lot of people. When I tried to get his attention, he even threatened me that he would look for another assistant. I can endure him in many ways, because I love him,but other people can not. He received punishment from the El company, that biggest Medical Devices company in New York. He lost all the thing he had before, the same as Jim. I hope my experience can help you in some ways. I heard you left when he insisted on giving all his money to Sam. I cannot tell it is right or wrong, but at least, you may give him some help when he was in the worst situation. You loved each other all the time right?
Hi, Annie. My name is Winda. Now I work in a small company in New York Cit. I am now working with my partner, a business man called Ray. We are doing the Medical Devices business. We are now on a hard way of making our business range wider.
I heard about your story with Jim; our pasts are quite similar. Ray was quite arrogant before. He insisted his own idea for ever although it disturbed a lot of people. When I tried to get his attention, he even threatened me that he would look for another assistant. I can endure him in many ways, because I love him,but other people can not. He received punishment from the El company, that biggest Medical Devices company in New York. He lost all the thing he had before, the same as Jim. I hope my experience can help you in some ways. I heard you left when he insisted on giving all his money to Sam. I cannot tell it is right or wrong, but at least, you may give him some help when he was in the worst situation. You loved each other all the time right?
Annie, what I chose was staying with him. I pointed way for him when he was in low ebb. Even I think Ray is more stubborn that Jim, I didn’t leave him. They only chose a wrong way. People always make mistakes; you and me make mistake too. Why not try to understand them, moreover Jim was chasing his dream. Annie,you may try to go back with Jim. You had a happy past, then you will have a happy future. He had already gotten his punishment.
Please give him some hope. We both don’t want to see him sink into despair, right?
Your faithfully
Winda Gusto
letter draft
Dear Annie
Hi, Annie. My name is Winda. Now I work in a small company in New York Cit. I am now work with my partner, a business man called Ray. We are doing the Medical Devices business. We are now on a hard way of making our business range wider.
I heard about your story with Jim; our pasts are quite similar. Ray was quite arrogant before. He insisted his own idea for ever although it disturbed a lot of people. When I tried to get his attention, he even threatened me that he would look for another assistant. I can endure him in many ways, because I love him,but other people can not. He receive punishment from the El company, that biggest Medical Devices company in New York. He lost all the thing he had before, the same as Jim. I hope my experience can help you in some ways. I heard you left when he insisted to give all his money to Sam. I cannot tell it is right or wrong, but at least, you may give him some help when he was in the worst situation. You loved each other all the time right?
Hi, Annie. My name is Winda. Now I work in a small company in New York Cit. I am now work with my partner, a business man called Ray. We are doing the Medical Devices business. We are now on a hard way of making our business range wider.
I heard about your story with Jim; our pasts are quite similar. Ray was quite arrogant before. He insisted his own idea for ever although it disturbed a lot of people. When I tried to get his attention, he even threatened me that he would look for another assistant. I can endure him in many ways, because I love him,but other people can not. He receive punishment from the El company, that biggest Medical Devices company in New York. He lost all the thing he had before, the same as Jim. I hope my experience can help you in some ways. I heard you left when he insisted to give all his money to Sam. I cannot tell it is right or wrong, but at least, you may give him some help when he was in the worst situation. You loved each other all the time right?
Annie, what I chose was staying with him. I pointed a way for him when he was in low ebb. Even I think Ray is more stubborn that Jim, I didn’t leave him. They only chose a wrong way. People always make mistakes, you and me make mistake too. Why not try to understand them, moreover Jim was chasing his dream. Annie, try to go back with Jim. You had a warm past, then you will have a happy future. He had already gotten his punishment.
Please give him some hope. We both don’t want to see him sink into despair, right?
Your faithfully
Winda Gusto
Monday, September 29, 2014
Dialogue
Winda pulled him out of the room.
“Ray, you can not handle this business follow your own idea any more! This one isn’t like those easy things we did before. You know what, if you keep rejecting their ideas, I promise you will get in big trouble!”
“What trouble? They’ll bite me? Winda, this is my business. Sometimes I need an assistant, but sometimes not.”
“Ray.” Winda calmed down fast. “Maybe you don’t know. That El company always has some unusual means. If we can not satisfy their requirement in some way, we won’t have peaceful day for business.”
“Winda, when did you become so timid? I am confident about it, so as my assistant, you should have confidence, too. Let me show you how I do business.”
“I know more than you do.” Winda thought.
Then the meeting started again.
Ray“Thanks for your waiting. I appreciate it. We had some private problem to solve.”
Businesses man“That’s fine. Let’s continued to talk about our business. The hospital needs some titanium plates, and I heard that yours are the best.”
Ray“Absolutely. Winda, bring the propaganda for me.”” Ray said confidently with a smile. “I promise our products are the best of this medical devices business. We also have a good prize for those awesome products. .
Ray“Through this propaganda, you can see why our products are the best. Best drill is made by best material. We don’t want some problems take place during the operation right? I did a research for that hospital, what they need are complete medical devices system. If you can give this job to us, I promise you can get a satisfying answer.”
Businesses man“ Mr. Creuset. What we are asking are lower prizes titanium plates but not tons of machine.”
Ray“What? Tons of machine? Those equipment can not be counted with tons. You call it...”
Businessman“Or we can call it tons of trash. Don't be that arrogant, Mr. Creuset. We are the customers but not you. Your arrogance already disturbed us. You and your tiny 'company' will get punished. ” The man in the black suit said with a sneer.
Ray“Get out of here. I’ll never do business with you disrespectful people. Get out! Winda, let them out!”
winda：i am so sorry for his unreasonable words.he he is not like this before.maybe He is in a bad mood today. I promised I will give you a answer after I talk with him，so plz，plz give us a chance.
Business man：“Chance? Aha Our disrespect people never give any chances. Enjoy the last few days in his company. This company will not be existed soon. See you, Poor assistant."
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Creative writing is interesting
How can famous writer be famous? The main point of a good writing is how this writing attracts people. When people writing creative writing, they always involuntarily limited into some laws. Creative writing can usually be novel and poem. Do you like to read novel in a format? The answer is no. People like to read about those novel which has a constrained style. It gives people a lot of space to imagine. When people read these novel, they are focusing on the plot, theme and climax but not language, grammar and vocab. Creative writing is different from other because it has special personality, independent thinking and different presentation.
How can a creative writing be creative? First people put their own ideas into their writing. With strong personality, a creative writing can attract more people. People do not read for taking an exam, they read for fun. After a writing has a strong personality, it becomes a real creative writing about not essay.
Different from essay, creative writing doesn’t need to refer some master piece. People usually don’t refer too much information except science fiction. How can the plot come out when people do the creative writing? It all comes from the their memory and imagination. Why creative writing can be in a constrained style? That is the kind of writing people want to read.
Creative writing usually has different presentation with other writing. Said before, creative writing doesn’t have any formats. It can be full of dialogue and tons of environment description. It may not have beginning and ending. Generally creative writing is a piece of writing that written follow people’s heart. Creative writing focus on description of those characters. Writer can give those character obviously personality by writing dialogue, which do not appear in formal essay.
Creative has the differences so it becomes special. If people ask me which type thing I love to write, my answer is creative writing. If people ask me which type thing I love to read, my answer is creative writing, too. Creative is always fun to read and write. What I did for this week’s creative writing pieces, is writing different parts when I get idea, then joint them together. This way some time make the writing become loose, but it makes sure that all parts of this creative writing is interesting. Most part of my creative writing is dialogue. I tried to use dialogue to give my character strong personality. Also I give a attractive plot, A rich man and his assistant work together . People usually say this kind of plot is not attractive any more, but they still love to read it. We start to think about the creative writing from a only a picture, so people can have a lot of space to imagine. Even with a same painting we can have a lot ideas for writing. That how creative writing becomes interesting.
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